Responding to Peers and Considering Rhetorical Situations

     In my literacy narrative i was writing a story with vivid detail on my process of literacy. In my ad analysis essay i am going to break down the ad detail by detail and analyze it to see what it is trying to tell me. Like my narrative essay my analysis essay will have a purpose as in why i am writting this and where is my stance on the issue. In my narrative essay my audience were my teacher, peers, and people who can relate to my essay it was very general, unlike my ad analysis essay it will probaly only target a certain type of audience. In my narrative essay my genre was written like a story and in my ad analysis it will probaly be more breaking down ideas and explaning. in my narrative essay my tone was changing depending on the situation i was, unlike my ad analysis will probaly have to have a tone as if i am arguing and explaining what the ad is about and what it's purpose is.

Analyzing an Advertisement

   Purpose: By showing showing 2 legs and one of them being a prosthetic leg and showing "Don't Drink and Drive" in big capitalize letters this ad shows a purpose to prevent drivers from "Drink and Drive". It argues that when car accidents happen because of drinking and driving it can lead to people being left without limbs and have to use prosthetics which are not as original as those for cars.
  Audience: By showing only legs and not showing the age, or sex of the individual this ad is meant for everyone who is a driver. it is showing that it doesn't matter who you are, and that if u drink and drive you can end up in the same situation as the individual in the ad.
  Genre: like many ads of drinking and driving this ad shows what tragedy can happen if you drink and drive. Drinking and driving can end up in you getting a ticket, going to the hospital, or even death.
  Tone: by the use of artificial limb and the white background it all creates a tone of being sad such as being in the hospital.

Thinking Critically about revisions

    There many ways my final paper looks different from my rough draft.  First by just looking at it i can tell that my final paper is a little bit longer. Some paragraphs i made longer to explain in more detail what i was talking about. In my rough draft i was just writing my ideas down and putting them together because i just wanted to finish my paper. In my rough draft i can see that i wasn't so sure how i wanted to present my information i just wanted to get something down on paper to see where i could make some changes. For my punctuations i can see that i didn't really changed a lot because it was the least of my issues that i wanted to work on. I can also see that i didn't change my title which i probably should have, but i am horrible with putting titles on my papers so i left it the same. 
     I made major revisions toward my paragraphs i changed my conclusion a lot i tried to ends my paper without trying to lecture my reader, but i might have done that unintentionally. i also fix some grammar mistakes on my introduction but overall i found it to be good. i also tried to add some more information to my other paragraphs. i also kind of tried to change my wording on my paragraphs to give them a sort of flow when reading. i tried to make them closely related so readers can know what i am talking about.
     After revising my pattern the error i tend to see was that i tend to make grammar mistakes and don't use a lot of complex sentences. i don't always put comma after fanboys and sometimes i make comma splices. I also notice that my organization isn't always the best.  I tend to jump all over the place and don't organize my paper.
       I made the revisions i made because of peer review. i know that peer reviews are to make me a stronger writer.  i know that my peer reviewer made some good points on my faults on my paper. he helped me make my paper stronger and  even gave me good input.
     i think that the strongest aspect on my paper were the introduction and my conclusion. i think it really grabbed readers attention and could relate. my weakest aspect was my punctuations and my organization.