Final Reflection

I think i have sort of completed my goals my writing still isn't at the level i would have wanted to leave this class at. I am glad i took this class because of the essays i wrote for this class such as an analysis essay i never done before. i saw a major improvement  on how i put my ideas on my essay the only downside is that i wasn't able to organize it better. I feel like my goals haven't been completely fulfill. i still have a long way to go, but i wont give up on making my writing stronger. Although i have come out of this class with good strengths such as writing good ideas on paper. i feel like my weakest point in writing is not asking for help. i need to ask for help when i cant do something by myself. i realize that everyone has problems with writing and asking for help doesn't mean my writing is worse. I also need to stop procrastinating on my writing assignments. I should stop procrastinating and not be afraid of success. in the end i feel that writing is still a skill i need to master and i will continue to try to improve it by fixing my weaknesses.

Planning for Revisions

For my portfolio i chose to rewrite my ad analysis essay. My strengths of my ad analysis essay was that i had many good points and i had good attempt at my thesis statement. My weakness of my paper was that my points were all over the place and i didn't organize my ideas. Also i could have had a stronger thesis.  

When i revise my essay i will state my thesis more clearly. Once my thesis is clearly stated i can then organize my ideas better to better support my points. i will try to make myself  think about the ad more effectively. I need to think outside the box and make questions to myself. I need to analyze more critically.

I will try to make a connection to my claims , ideas, and points to the text. I will not make myself go off topic and always try to connect my ideas to the text to make myself more trustworthy. i also will add more descriptive details to my essay to make the audience see what i see in the ad.

Analyzing and Writing Arguments

• i analyzed don't persume to know a pigs mind and in that essay the author used a almost kind of sarcastic tone which made his arguments against chipotle mexican grill seem so obviously right; however, this kind of tone also made me believe that he was telling his audience what to think which might have cause some audience to lose interest in the reading. This taught me that my tone can easily be untrustworthy if i don't connect to my audience right
• Another thing i notice while analyzing this essay was that the author doesn't just give out his what he is arguing out there. like in his essay he was basically saying he supported factory farming , yet he never really used that word; however this is a problem since he makes it seem like factory farming is a horrible thing since he wont say it himself. this has taught me that i must tell what i am arguing about and include details to not lose my audience.
• finally i notice how the author used good supporting details to support his arguments. he said that if we go back to farming the old way people might have to pay more for bacon. This taught me that i must use good supporting details that will make me trustworthy and seem like i know what i am talking about.

Thinking Critically About Evidence

       Students should not go to college full time and have a side job on the side because it will cause their grades to go down, it may cause stress to students, and will not be able to prioritize.

• My strongest argument would be that balancing 2 things at once like school and work might not turn out to be a smart thing because it may cause students health problems such as stress. Students might not be able to keep up with the H.W and trying to work at the same time. Some students might even have to pull off an all nighter just to finish a essay they may be working on. By doing so they may feel sleeping during class and wont be paying attention like they should. This will also cause students to get less sleep and might feel like they cant do it anymore they need their sleep and will eventually drop a class. Students are more likely to drop a class if needed to keep up with their daily life, yet students aren't more likely to quit their job.

• My weakest argument would be that there are some student out there who need a job in order to buy their books and other stuff necessary for them to succeed as students. they might need a job because the FASFA money they are getting now isn't enough to cover all of their studies. Their are also many students who have part time jobs and are OK balancing their student life and their work life. Students might See this as a opportunity to grow and be responsible.

Patterns of Error

•    The first error i see in my writing so far is that i tend to make a lot of grammar mistakes. i tend to confuse or misspell words. I also forget to put comes before FANBOYS. I also tend to sometimes have some run- on sentences. I can also be wordy by using describing a process by saying "and then", i also use the words "i guess" and even "in my opinion".
•    Another error i see in my writing would have to be that i don't always make my thesis clear enough. Although sometimes i believe it makes sense, it the end it only makes sense to me. i need to be able to explain my thesis better. I also have a problem with coming up with my own titles. i am not able to make my own titles and usually put anything and ignore it.
•    Another error i see in my writing would have to be that i am not able to be clear in my paper. i have ideas scatter all over the place. Although it makes sense to me it can be confusing for people who are reading my paper. People usually get confuse when i am talking about something and suddenly move to another point. i need to be more clear on the points i am trying to make. i need to be able to organize my ideas better, so my paper can have a better flow and people can understand it better.

Thinking Critically About Peer Review

     The type of peer review we do in class is effective because my peers help me think of stuff i might not be able to find myself. They put good criticism on my paper. Although i might not always agree with the changes, i do always take it into consideration. Peer reviewing others people paper one can always find an error that the writer didn't notice and help them correct it. Peer reviewing has help me a lot in making my papers more understandable to my readers. My strengths in peer reviewing would have to be that i am able to make good corrections on someones paper, but not criticize the writer. My weakness would have to be that sometimes i might not be a good peer reviewer because i might not find a lot of mistakes on a paper, yet i do wanna help the best i can. The way peer review can be improves is if peer review was in smaller groups because i am sometimes not comfortable working in large groups. i am able to speak more clearly if the the group is smaller. I would also like a little more time on peer reviewing but then again the time get now is enough time.

A Choice In Topics

   What i have enjoyed so far in my college experience would have to be the community most of the people i have met in my classes have been really nice towards me and treat me with respect. Another thing i have enjoyed so far in my college experience would have to be my classes. i have really like my teachers, and some of the things i am learning are new to me but are also very interesting. For example, my survey of psychology class i have learned about sleeping disorders such as sleep walking, and insomnia. I have also learned the different types of rocks such as sedimentary, metamorphic and igneous in my FYE class;Chicago rocks. i have also learned how Chicago used to have tropical weather until a glacier hit it and eventually the glacier melted shaping the land differently. all of these classes are new to me that my old high school didn't offer. i also have enjoyed the gym in neiu it is  fun to go when you just want to play a sport and kill time. What i have enjoyed the least in my college experience would have to be how sometimes if am not careful my homework can pile up on me really quick. this is a problem since i been known to procrastinate on assignments and homework. there isn't much that i haven't liked about my college experience, although i wish sometimes i was more involve into the neiu community but sometimes it is hard since i don't know many people. i guess in time i would try to get more involve like joining a club but there is always time and am in no rush.

Thinking about Arguments

     In the article "Don't Presume to Know a Pig's mind" by Tarkio, Mo it talks about how a commercial from chipotle Mexican grill is starting to make farmers think twice about how they are raising there pigs and even how they are raising other farm animals they have. In the article the author makes an arguments about how chipotle claims to only use happier pigs, yet they don't explain how they know if the pigs are happy and how do they measure their happiness. he claims that there is no way to measure the happiness of a pig and the only thing we can agree on is that pig production shouldn't cause pain "needless pain" to the pigs. he then goes on by saying that we don't know for sure if pigs aren't happy living inside a warm, dry building, and in the end it doesn't matter because the pig end up on a plate. the article then states that after the commercial ran mcdonalds made an announcement on how they would make their pork supplier end gestation crates, but then argues on how those crates are meant to feed the pigs equally because when they are put on grouped pens the pigs are known to be aggressive and start fights so they can eat most of the food. in the end he talks about how we cant ask pigs which life style they prefer the only thing we do know might happen is that the price of pork will rise, and although many companies might be able to afford the changes or at least have the political sway to resist them , small farmers raising hogs now will be push out of the industry. farmers are business people who responds to market signal but they are being mixed because some say we need to produce more as prices and world hunger are increasing, yet others are disputing over the animal cares and want plentiful and affordable food supply.
      i chose this article because it interested me. the author of the article made good points on the issue at hand. i think i might do ok writing on the topic yet i might come across some problems. i mostly chose this article because the title caught my attention. i wanted to keep on reading and understand what the title meant. in the end the article was interesting and i didnt know this issues was happening and would like to analyze it further.      

Reflecting on Progress

        Looking back on my first blog post i think i am making progress on some of my goals. I have notice some improvements on my writing compare to what it was coming into the class. i think i understand better the grammar mistakes i make while writing my papers which helps me identify them and correct them. i might not always catch every single mistake but most of the time i feel like i can identify my grammar mistakes on my paper. The thing i belief i haven't improve on my writing is how i start my papers i always have a tendency to not get to the point quick. i tend to put a lot of hooks to try to catch the readers eye and sometimes i don't explain my thesis clearly. Peer review has helped me a lot. My peer reviewer always has something to say that helps me out. peer review helps me understand how people look at my paper and if what i wrote makes sense. it helps me understand the reader and helps me improve my paper as well as my writing. at first i didn't like peer review but not as i am getting out of my comfort zone i realize that peer review is a benefit i should take advantage of. i will help me grow and become a better writer at the end. although i haven't completed my goals fully i know i am on my way and i know i will try my best to get better at my writing skills.

Responding to Peers and Considering Rhetorical Situations

     In my literacy narrative i was writing a story with vivid detail on my process of literacy. In my ad analysis essay i am going to break down the ad detail by detail and analyze it to see what it is trying to tell me. Like my narrative essay my analysis essay will have a purpose as in why i am writting this and where is my stance on the issue. In my narrative essay my audience were my teacher, peers, and people who can relate to my essay it was very general, unlike my ad analysis essay it will probaly only target a certain type of audience. In my narrative essay my genre was written like a story and in my ad analysis it will probaly be more breaking down ideas and explaning. in my narrative essay my tone was changing depending on the situation i was, unlike my ad analysis will probaly have to have a tone as if i am arguing and explaining what the ad is about and what it's purpose is.

Analyzing an Advertisement

   Purpose: By showing showing 2 legs and one of them being a prosthetic leg and showing "Don't Drink and Drive" in big capitalize letters this ad shows a purpose to prevent drivers from "Drink and Drive". It argues that when car accidents happen because of drinking and driving it can lead to people being left without limbs and have to use prosthetics which are not as original as those for cars.
  Audience: By showing only legs and not showing the age, or sex of the individual this ad is meant for everyone who is a driver. it is showing that it doesn't matter who you are, and that if u drink and drive you can end up in the same situation as the individual in the ad.
  Genre: like many ads of drinking and driving this ad shows what tragedy can happen if you drink and drive. Drinking and driving can end up in you getting a ticket, going to the hospital, or even death.
  Tone: by the use of artificial limb and the white background it all creates a tone of being sad such as being in the hospital.

Thinking Critically about revisions

    There many ways my final paper looks different from my rough draft.  First by just looking at it i can tell that my final paper is a little bit longer. Some paragraphs i made longer to explain in more detail what i was talking about. In my rough draft i was just writing my ideas down and putting them together because i just wanted to finish my paper. In my rough draft i can see that i wasn't so sure how i wanted to present my information i just wanted to get something down on paper to see where i could make some changes. For my punctuations i can see that i didn't really changed a lot because it was the least of my issues that i wanted to work on. I can also see that i didn't change my title which i probably should have, but i am horrible with putting titles on my papers so i left it the same. 
     I made major revisions toward my paragraphs i changed my conclusion a lot i tried to ends my paper without trying to lecture my reader, but i might have done that unintentionally. i also fix some grammar mistakes on my introduction but overall i found it to be good. i also tried to add some more information to my other paragraphs. i also kind of tried to change my wording on my paragraphs to give them a sort of flow when reading. i tried to make them closely related so readers can know what i am talking about.
     After revising my pattern the error i tend to see was that i tend to make grammar mistakes and don't use a lot of complex sentences. i don't always put comma after fanboys and sometimes i make comma splices. I also notice that my organization isn't always the best.  I tend to jump all over the place and don't organize my paper.
       I made the revisions i made because of peer review. i know that peer reviews are to make me a stronger writer.  i know that my peer reviewer made some good points on my faults on my paper. he helped me make my paper stronger and  even gave me good input.
     i think that the strongest aspect on my paper were the introduction and my conclusion. i think it really grabbed readers attention and could relate. my weakest aspect was my punctuations and my organization.
                                            

"Good" Papers

     organizing your paper-  first thing that makes a good paper is how you organize your paper. I believe the difference between an A to a C paper is how you organize your ideas. A good paper must have good organization of ideas and have a good flow when a person reads your paper. If your ideas are all over the place a reader might not be able to understand what the paper is about. You want to be as clear as you can be and get your point across your audience. A good organization of paragraphs will keep the reader interested in what you are writing.
      second thing i believe is the difference between an A paper and a C paper is  grammar mistakes and sentence structure. A C paper might have some grammar mistakes and a few good sentence structures. An A paper will have good sentence structures using conjunction words such as FANBOYS and even transition words. An A paper will also have a few grammar mistakes that we all make such as there and their. This is important because a reader will be able to understand better what you are writing.
       third thing i believe is the difference between an A paper and a C paper is a good topic. A writer needs a good topic to write about because they need to be able to get good points and plenty of them to not repeat them over. An average paper may have some points,and then are repeated just in a different way. A good paper will have different points and plenty to talk about to keep the reader interested.

For me writing with good sentence structures and not having a lot of grammar mistakes is difficult for me. i cant really write good complex sentences unsing conjunctions. i also make quite a few grammar mistakes that are silly. i am horrible at making complex sentences that involve using conjunctions such as therefore, meanwhile, whenever, although and ect... i also make mistakes with words such their, there, quiet, quite, ect... sometimes i feel silly for letting this kinds of little mistakes get pass me.

Generating ideas

      I dont know many ideas of narrative writtings i can write about.  I am personally horrible at thinking about narrative writings i can write about. one idea for a narritive essay i can write about about is horrible experience. i believe i can describe a bad experience that has happen to me. this is  a good narrivite writting because it involves recalling a memory. it is also a good narrative because its for a general type of audience. everyone can relate to a bad experience that has happen to them.
       another good narrative that i can write about is the struggle of learning a new language. First coming to the U.S i could only speak spanish and hard a struggle learning english fluently. This is a good narritive because a lot of people have struggles trying to learn a new language and can relate to this topic. this topic can provide descriptive ideas on my struggles, but also on how i found ways to coped with them.
         another narrative writing i can write about is moving to a new country and acdapting to the culture and the different ways they do things. for example when i first moved here i had to adapt to the different type of education they had here in the US and also adapt to their culture here. i think this is a good narritive because i can tell detail by detail my struggles to adapt. its a experience i can tell and maybe people can relate.

Why I am taking english 101

There are many reasons why i am taking the 101 writing class. The first reason is because it is a require class that i need to take that been said i also want to improve my writing since i know my writing isn't the best out there, and there is always room for improvement. I constantly make spelling errors and sometimes have a hard time writing my ideas on paper the way i want to express them. I believe that writing 101 is a require class because wherever one ends up getting a job you must always have have some basic require  writing skills that will help you succeed. I am also taking writing 101 because writing is a way to express yourself and i have always felt that i haven't always done that. After i am done with this class i hope to be able to write well enough for people to be able to understand what i am trying to say. In a way i also believe that this writing class will help me with my speaking skills. i might be able to communicate better with other people. As a student with an undecided major this writing class my provide me with some kind of a idea on what i might want to do. for example if my writing improves and i know that i enjoy writing, i might chose a major that involves a lot of writing. By the end of this class i hope to improve my spelling, my sentence structures, and the way i arrange my ideas. I also hope to make writing a skill i have master like riding a bike and not finding it so difficult.