Thinking Critically about revisions

    There many ways my final paper looks different from my rough draft.  First by just looking at it i can tell that my final paper is a little bit longer. Some paragraphs i made longer to explain in more detail what i was talking about. In my rough draft i was just writing my ideas down and putting them together because i just wanted to finish my paper. In my rough draft i can see that i wasn't so sure how i wanted to present my information i just wanted to get something down on paper to see where i could make some changes. For my punctuations i can see that i didn't really changed a lot because it was the least of my issues that i wanted to work on. I can also see that i didn't change my title which i probably should have, but i am horrible with putting titles on my papers so i left it the same. 
     I made major revisions toward my paragraphs i changed my conclusion a lot i tried to ends my paper without trying to lecture my reader, but i might have done that unintentionally. i also fix some grammar mistakes on my introduction but overall i found it to be good. i also tried to add some more information to my other paragraphs. i also kind of tried to change my wording on my paragraphs to give them a sort of flow when reading. i tried to make them closely related so readers can know what i am talking about.
     After revising my pattern the error i tend to see was that i tend to make grammar mistakes and don't use a lot of complex sentences. i don't always put comma after fanboys and sometimes i make comma splices. I also notice that my organization isn't always the best.  I tend to jump all over the place and don't organize my paper.
       I made the revisions i made because of peer review. i know that peer reviews are to make me a stronger writer.  i know that my peer reviewer made some good points on my faults on my paper. he helped me make my paper stronger and  even gave me good input.
     i think that the strongest aspect on my paper were the introduction and my conclusion. i think it really grabbed readers attention and could relate. my weakest aspect was my punctuations and my organization.