Analyzing and Writing Arguments

• i analyzed don't persume to know a pigs mind and in that essay the author used a almost kind of sarcastic tone which made his arguments against chipotle mexican grill seem so obviously right; however, this kind of tone also made me believe that he was telling his audience what to think which might have cause some audience to lose interest in the reading. This taught me that my tone can easily be untrustworthy if i don't connect to my audience right
• Another thing i notice while analyzing this essay was that the author doesn't just give out his what he is arguing out there. like in his essay he was basically saying he supported factory farming , yet he never really used that word; however this is a problem since he makes it seem like factory farming is a horrible thing since he wont say it himself. this has taught me that i must tell what i am arguing about and include details to not lose my audience.
• finally i notice how the author used good supporting details to support his arguments. he said that if we go back to farming the old way people might have to pay more for bacon. This taught me that i must use good supporting details that will make me trustworthy and seem like i know what i am talking about.

Thinking Critically About Evidence

       Students should not go to college full time and have a side job on the side because it will cause their grades to go down, it may cause stress to students, and will not be able to prioritize.

• My strongest argument would be that balancing 2 things at once like school and work might not turn out to be a smart thing because it may cause students health problems such as stress. Students might not be able to keep up with the H.W and trying to work at the same time. Some students might even have to pull off an all nighter just to finish a essay they may be working on. By doing so they may feel sleeping during class and wont be paying attention like they should. This will also cause students to get less sleep and might feel like they cant do it anymore they need their sleep and will eventually drop a class. Students are more likely to drop a class if needed to keep up with their daily life, yet students aren't more likely to quit their job.

• My weakest argument would be that there are some student out there who need a job in order to buy their books and other stuff necessary for them to succeed as students. they might need a job because the FASFA money they are getting now isn't enough to cover all of their studies. Their are also many students who have part time jobs and are OK balancing their student life and their work life. Students might See this as a opportunity to grow and be responsible.

Patterns of Error

•    The first error i see in my writing so far is that i tend to make a lot of grammar mistakes. i tend to confuse or misspell words. I also forget to put comes before FANBOYS. I also tend to sometimes have some run- on sentences. I can also be wordy by using describing a process by saying "and then", i also use the words "i guess" and even "in my opinion".
•    Another error i see in my writing would have to be that i don't always make my thesis clear enough. Although sometimes i believe it makes sense, it the end it only makes sense to me. i need to be able to explain my thesis better. I also have a problem with coming up with my own titles. i am not able to make my own titles and usually put anything and ignore it.
•    Another error i see in my writing would have to be that i am not able to be clear in my paper. i have ideas scatter all over the place. Although it makes sense to me it can be confusing for people who are reading my paper. People usually get confuse when i am talking about something and suddenly move to another point. i need to be more clear on the points i am trying to make. i need to be able to organize my ideas better, so my paper can have a better flow and people can understand it better.

Thinking Critically About Peer Review

     The type of peer review we do in class is effective because my peers help me think of stuff i might not be able to find myself. They put good criticism on my paper. Although i might not always agree with the changes, i do always take it into consideration. Peer reviewing others people paper one can always find an error that the writer didn't notice and help them correct it. Peer reviewing has help me a lot in making my papers more understandable to my readers. My strengths in peer reviewing would have to be that i am able to make good corrections on someones paper, but not criticize the writer. My weakness would have to be that sometimes i might not be a good peer reviewer because i might not find a lot of mistakes on a paper, yet i do wanna help the best i can. The way peer review can be improves is if peer review was in smaller groups because i am sometimes not comfortable working in large groups. i am able to speak more clearly if the the group is smaller. I would also like a little more time on peer reviewing but then again the time get now is enough time.

A Choice In Topics

   What i have enjoyed so far in my college experience would have to be the community most of the people i have met in my classes have been really nice towards me and treat me with respect. Another thing i have enjoyed so far in my college experience would have to be my classes. i have really like my teachers, and some of the things i am learning are new to me but are also very interesting. For example, my survey of psychology class i have learned about sleeping disorders such as sleep walking, and insomnia. I have also learned the different types of rocks such as sedimentary, metamorphic and igneous in my FYE class;Chicago rocks. i have also learned how Chicago used to have tropical weather until a glacier hit it and eventually the glacier melted shaping the land differently. all of these classes are new to me that my old high school didn't offer. i also have enjoyed the gym in neiu it is  fun to go when you just want to play a sport and kill time. What i have enjoyed the least in my college experience would have to be how sometimes if am not careful my homework can pile up on me really quick. this is a problem since i been known to procrastinate on assignments and homework. there isn't much that i haven't liked about my college experience, although i wish sometimes i was more involve into the neiu community but sometimes it is hard since i don't know many people. i guess in time i would try to get more involve like joining a club but there is always time and am in no rush.

Thinking about Arguments

     In the article "Don't Presume to Know a Pig's mind" by Tarkio, Mo it talks about how a commercial from chipotle Mexican grill is starting to make farmers think twice about how they are raising there pigs and even how they are raising other farm animals they have. In the article the author makes an arguments about how chipotle claims to only use happier pigs, yet they don't explain how they know if the pigs are happy and how do they measure their happiness. he claims that there is no way to measure the happiness of a pig and the only thing we can agree on is that pig production shouldn't cause pain "needless pain" to the pigs. he then goes on by saying that we don't know for sure if pigs aren't happy living inside a warm, dry building, and in the end it doesn't matter because the pig end up on a plate. the article then states that after the commercial ran mcdonalds made an announcement on how they would make their pork supplier end gestation crates, but then argues on how those crates are meant to feed the pigs equally because when they are put on grouped pens the pigs are known to be aggressive and start fights so they can eat most of the food. in the end he talks about how we cant ask pigs which life style they prefer the only thing we do know might happen is that the price of pork will rise, and although many companies might be able to afford the changes or at least have the political sway to resist them , small farmers raising hogs now will be push out of the industry. farmers are business people who responds to market signal but they are being mixed because some say we need to produce more as prices and world hunger are increasing, yet others are disputing over the animal cares and want plentiful and affordable food supply.
      i chose this article because it interested me. the author of the article made good points on the issue at hand. i think i might do ok writing on the topic yet i might come across some problems. i mostly chose this article because the title caught my attention. i wanted to keep on reading and understand what the title meant. in the end the article was interesting and i didnt know this issues was happening and would like to analyze it further.      

Reflecting on Progress

        Looking back on my first blog post i think i am making progress on some of my goals. I have notice some improvements on my writing compare to what it was coming into the class. i think i understand better the grammar mistakes i make while writing my papers which helps me identify them and correct them. i might not always catch every single mistake but most of the time i feel like i can identify my grammar mistakes on my paper. The thing i belief i haven't improve on my writing is how i start my papers i always have a tendency to not get to the point quick. i tend to put a lot of hooks to try to catch the readers eye and sometimes i don't explain my thesis clearly. Peer review has helped me a lot. My peer reviewer always has something to say that helps me out. peer review helps me understand how people look at my paper and if what i wrote makes sense. it helps me understand the reader and helps me improve my paper as well as my writing. at first i didn't like peer review but not as i am getting out of my comfort zone i realize that peer review is a benefit i should take advantage of. i will help me grow and become a better writer at the end. although i haven't completed my goals fully i know i am on my way and i know i will try my best to get better at my writing skills.